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I just posted a similar thread in the Swinging & Single forum, but I thought it would also be a good idea for couples as we do occasionally have couples who come here asking for a critique of their ad.

 

So if you'd like to have your ad critiqued by others, please post your link here and we'll all take a look and give you some honest feedback.

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Julie,

We would love to have you look over our profile. ranchcouple on SLS

 

Thanks,

ranchcouple

Hey ranchcouple! :)

 

Your add looks okay, but can I suggest a few things?

 

The default pic on your profile (which is of the Mr. for those of us who are non-paying) should be G-rated. As a woman, I find G-rated pics of males more pleasing and they make the couple more approachable to me.

 

Also, under the 'Describe Yourself' area of your profile, you have a typo on the second line, between "either and safe".

 

Another thing I noticed, is that you're listed as a "Moderate" couple, but you don't really elaborate on what kind of sexual experiences you're willing to try or are interested in. For example, soft swing, same room sex, voyeurism, etc... The reader needs to know what they might have in common with you, so they'll be comfortable contacting you.

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I am not sure how to copy link with our profile too, but would love any comments on our profile, good or bad.

 

TnTDaytonOhio on SLS

 

 

Thank you

Wow!

 

Great profile! I wish the couples that contacted us would be as 'real' as you two appear to be.

 

Usually when you don't have any pics on your profile, a lot of people will tend to pass it by. Since you're concerned with discretion, which is understandable, why not place some other types of pics. They don't even have to be of you two. Maybe find a few pics that describe who or what ya'll are about. For instance, the country club you play golf at or a favorite animal or even a funny cartoon couple.

 

On SLS, you can do a general search for couples and exclude ones that don't have pics from your search. Since you are paid members, it shows that you have a real interest in swinging and not just passing by taking a peek, but couples might miss you from their general searches if they browse the site the way I mentioned. If you have some sort of pic on your profile, you're apt to get more traffic to your profile.

 

Also, if I were you, I'd lose the 'stage fright' reference. Everything else is so well written, but that leads the reader to wonder how delicate your wife is and alludes that she's easily made uncomfortable. I'd chop that sentence off at the word 'slow". That conveys the message nicely. :)

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Ranchcouple, speaking of your SLS profile, you might want to fix your profile here via the User CP to list your correct username on SLS (you currently have it listed as ranchcouple3 rather than ranchcouple

 

Regarding your profile itself... I think this is the type that Ves was referring to, it caught my eye as well because it left me confused.

and don't expect you to be either is "safe" she is not.

 

Also have to agree with Ves that you should elaborate on what it is you are looking for (i.e. full swap? soft swing? less now more later?). I also thought your choice for default (and only non-private pic) was a bit odd. It's nice to see an add that actually includes a picture of the male half, but when no picture of the female half is visible it tends to make me wonder if she knows the ad exists (or if she exists). I liked the pic itself but you might want to show both of you.

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TnTDaytonOhio - great profile, the only thing I'd like to see added is a picture, even g-rated with or without faces. Without a picture I would suggest maybe attempting to describe yourselves physically a little more detailed.

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hey, you can check out hubby and I's... tracy1878 on swinglifestyle.com I think that's the right way to do it, if not, it's the same on there as it is on here. Thanks for the feedback!

Hi guys! Great profile and nice choice of pics! :)

 

I found a couple of typos, however.

 

"Definitely" and "experience".

 

Ya'll have a great add, you include just the right amount of information about yourselves and I adore the default pic of the two of you.

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Although I am not Julie, I wanted to Chime in NakedInSeattle.

 

I think that you have a great profile! Your pictures are fantastic and tastefully done. I love that you have added a picture of you guys with your little dog. It left me with the impression that you are fun, kind and genuine.

 

I think your descriptions are nice. You have definitely covered a lot of ground. I wonder if it would read better if you included combined descriptions Such as:

 

'She is an active tri-athlete, who loves SCUBA diving, sports, and gourmet cooking. We are avid Nudists who love the outdoors.'

 

Also, I am not sure what the Fraternity thing is, but I think that may be a cute tag line. It would definitely get my attention.

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Don't leave it to me to comment here, please. My idea was for anyone to review others profiles and to have their own reviewed if they like. We all see different things when we look and while a profile may be perfect to one person someone else may see something that jumps out at them as a great big red flag or question mark. We can all learn something from this :)

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We would love someone to review our profile. wicpl2002us on swinglifestyle.com

 

The thing that jumped out at me was that you joined SLS is 2002 and still haven't been certified, or have a picture on-line. I would immediately think you were a man whose wife doesn't know anything about this. That may not be the case, but that is my immediate reaction when I see an that.

 

There were a couple of typos in the ad, but I think if you copy and paste your ad into MS Word, it will tell you where the grammatical and spelling errors are, and give you suggestions on repairing them.

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Biblonde I really can't come up with anything to say about yours. Great pics, and you obviously have put a lot of thought into your profile. It's thorough and interesting.

 

NakedInSeattle, I have to agree with Indy, I found myself with two questions reading your profile - what the heck is Fraternity Snoqualmie? and how long have you guys been swinging?

 

Wiscpl - a picture would probably increase your responses. Although you do address that and hopefully the way you have addressed it increases the number of serious replies that you get to your ad.

I'm wondering if you find yourselves getting responses from single guys. Even tho you don't mention single guys in your ad I saw a couple of things that might draw them to you like,

watching her with another man. If this is what you like let us know.

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loveonme01 - your pictures leave me wondering if you are a 2female couple. No pics of the guy whatsoever? And you don't list a weight for him, I noticed. Those two things together would definitely leave me wondering what was up with you two.

 

all so =also

 

I would suggest taking some time to go back through and write out your responses rather than using shorthand and actually capitalize your sentences, etc. Remember, this is your first impression; and things like this

i have been with a cpl of Lady's b/f
leave one unsure if you are saying you've been with a couple of ladies before, or a couple of lady's boyfriends.

 

Your profile is very centered around the female half. Does the male not participate? If so you should make that clear. Does he just like to watch? You mentioned your desire to give him a FMF threesome, are you interested in swapping partners with another couple? You did mention seeking couples. Or, are you guys just looking for bi females willing to join the two of you.

 

Basically, I would just really take some time to express what it is that you are looking for. I'm sure you know what that is, but you have to make sure that those reading your profile know when they are doing reading.

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gapfiller on swinglifestyle.com

 

I would love some outside opinions, bring it on, I can take it.

 

Love the tats! Profile looks okay to us, but I would leave out the pet part. That just makes ya go ewwww even though that isn't something you are into. Most aren't, so doesn't need to be said.

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The thing that jumped out at me was that you joined SLS is 2002 and still haven't been certified, or have a picture on-line. I would immediately think you were a man whose wife doesn't know anything about this. That may not be the case, but that is my immediate reaction when I see an that.

 

I can see what you mean. Although I, the male half, do most of the posting she is in this 100%. There are two reasons we haven't been certified on SLS. 1) The couples we have meet on SLS were not paid members and you need to be a paid member to certify someone. 2) We haven't had much luck finding couples we are interested in. We are not snobs but we have certain criteria that we go by. This reduces the amount of success we have on there but that is by our choice.

 

Thanks for the feedback northindycpl. We had pictures but took them down and are in the process of getting more. (Which can be just as much fun as swinging at times.) :)

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loveonme01 - your pictures leave me wondering if you are a 2female couple. No pics of the guy whatsoever? And you don't list a weight for him, I noticed. Those two things together would definitely leave me wondering what was up with you two.

 

all so =also

 

I would suggest taking some time to go back through and write out your responses rather than using shorthand and actually capitalize your sentences, etc. Remember, this is your first impression; and things like this leave one unsure if you are saying you've been with a couple of ladies before, or a couple of lady's boyfriends.

 

Your profile is very centered around the female half. Does the male not participate? If so you should make that clear. Does he just like to watch? You mentioned your desire to give him a FMF threesome, are you interested in swapping partners with another couple? You did mention seeking couples. Or, are you guys just looking for bi females willing to join the two of you.

 

Basically, I would just really take some time to express what it is that you are looking for. I'm sure you know what that is, but you have to make sure that those reading your profile know when they are doing reading.

 

Ditto! I agree with your comments as well. I also thought they were a lesbian couple.

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I would love some outside opinions, bring it on, I can take it.

 

I just have to say that the pic with the smiley face is just to cute...shows a great sense of humor.

 

Teresa

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Good timing!

 

We haven't been having much luck with ours, so we were going to redo it this weekend - maybe even (GASP) add a couple of pics... Big step for the monkeys...

 

Anyhoo - spoomonkey on SLS

 

Spoomonkey

 

PS - How do you get certified?

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Good timing!

 

We haven't been having much luck with ours, so we were going to redo it this weekend - maybe even (GASP) add a couple of pics... Big step for the monkeys...

 

Anyhoo - spoomonkey on SLS it is.

 

Spoomonkey

 

PS - How do you get certified?

Hey Monkeys!

 

I've told you before that I absolutely love your profile. The only thing I would add is a pic - I understand your reluctance, but don't show faces.

 

Everyone is talking about the certification thing...we state in our profile that we do not certify nor do we accept certifications-because we did that with our old profile & were sort of, how shall I say...virtually stalked I guess.

 

Sls tech support will certify you if you submit a video recording.

 

;)

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Good timing!

 

We haven't been having much luck with ours, so we were going to redo it this weekend - maybe even (GASP) add a couple of pics... Big step for the monkeys...

 

Anyhoo - spoomonkey on SLS it is.

 

Spoomonkey

 

PS - How do you get certified?

 

I agree with the Naughty's ...a pic is definitely needed...not one necessarily showing your faces but one like Mrs. Spoos avatar pic would be great. Of course even without a pic, just reading over it , it would/did definitely capture my interest and make me want to know more.

 

Teresa

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It's a VERY nice profile Spoomonkey. But here is why it would not attract us.

 

1.You have no pictures at all. We are not going to bother with emails, sending attachments, etc. It's easy enough to do- but it's just time and aggravation.

 

2. You are not certified. And you have been members for almost a year. Not having been certified in that time frame makes us think that you are a want-to-be. The certification means that you have actually met someone- hence you are not a poser, lamer- or adjective of your choice. Doesn't mean that that is the case- but that's what runs through our minds.

 

We will meet non-certified couples- but only with some trepidation.

 

We respectfully disagree with Mr&Mrs-naughty's stance- but it seems that they have reasons. And they offered a solution- certification by the SLS management.

 

Add some pics- and make them private. And get certified.

 

Now as far as the prose itself- EXCELLENT. Wouldn't change a thing. Well, there is the "platmates" typo :)

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Reading over all the great suggestions that have been given so far to everyone made us go back and flesh out our ad a little bit...reading over it again there are still a few things I have thought about adding but ya'll can take a look and see what's missing on it.

tblonde312 on swinglifestyle.com

 

Teresa

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TNT- EXCELLENT profile, in our humble opinion.

 

The pictures are tasteful, and erotic.

 

The prose is clear, and easy to read.

 

This could be a model template- again- in our humble opinion.

 

p.s. stop smoking- it's bad for erections ;)

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TNT - I thought it was great. The pictures are, as stated above, tasteful, yet VERY erotic.

 

Nice beach pics, too. Makes me miss home...

 

:(

 

Spoomonkey

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Ok.... We are northindycpl on SLS.

 

I dislike the ability to separate paragraphs in the descriptions. I have not been able to figure out how to do that if at all- Does anyone know?

 

We still get a lot of response to the ad, maybe 10 a week, plus the ones that we send there.

 

BTW, I like my naked pictures. So I want to keep them up. We aren't a face pic kinda couple ;)

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I would love to hear suggestions for our profile... SC_GAcouple on SLS

 

Thanks, R (f)

 

I have a few suggestions: (I wasn't able to view the pictures yet, my kids haven't left for school :cool:)

 

-Avoid abbreviations

-Add a bit more information. I was wondering what kind of fun you were looking for? The ad leaves me with the impression that you are somewhat new, and so fun to you could mean flirting and some soft. I would be more inclined to respond if I clearly knew the perimeters of what you desire.

-I want to know more about you two. Are you professional? Do you enjoy going out to clubs, or would you prefer to have dinner? What are your hobbies? What you look like isn't as important to me as who you are.

-Now, since you are new, I would like to know more about your experiences, and your fantasies. Have you experienced a club- do you want to go back?

Is your fantasy to be with another couple or singles only?

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thanks to those who checked out our profile. I took the suggestion of removing the part about pets.

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I would love to hear suggestions for our profile... SC_GAcouple on SLS

 

Thanks, R (f)

 

I like your photo choices, very tasteful.

 

I have to agree with the earlier comment that you need to flesh it out a bit and be a little more descriptive with what it is you are hoping to find. Even if it's just to go to the fantasy section and actually list some of the fantasies you'd like to fulfill through swinging.

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Great, thanks for offering this for us. He is ours, and if anyone viewing it has any interest, please write us as well *smile* ChrisSuzanne on swinglifestyle.com

Please don't be kind, as we would really like to improve.

 

The picture (I always start here because it is the first thing you see when you open a profile). It looks like an add for Hedonism. We can barely see you. Logged in as a member, I can at least click and get a larger view which gives me an idea of your body types so it is better than no picture. But I might suggest cropping the picture to remove the big Hedonism logo and to put yourselves a little more center.

 

What does like-minded mean? I think I may start a thread with this question. Unless we know how you think, we don't know if we are like-minded. Open-minded might be a better adjective to use there.

 

What do you consider freaky? Is tying you up too much? Or do you just not want someone to bring their animals along?

 

soft-swings = soft-swingers

 

Fantasies and Experiences:

Our description pretty much answers this section
actually it doesn't. It gives us a little idea of your experiences, but nothing about your fantasies.

 

Please contact us, and if we are not a match please don't ignore us. Write and say we are not a match, and if you want to say why...but not necessary.
This is a little confusing, do you mean that anyone who looks at your profile should write you regardless of if they are interested? I assume you are referring to those you have written but you might want to clear that up.

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Oww...just kidding. I see why things might be confusing, and the picture thing. We will work on making corrections. Thanks, love your board.

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A lot of your profiles are so good it makes me a little self conscious about ours, but I can always use any suggestions that might improve it.

 

So randp on swinglifestyle.com it is, let me know what you think.

 

As far as certification goes, we have a lot of the reservations that the Naughty's mentioned about them. And while we have met a fair number of people as a result of our sls ad, no one has ever offered to certify us yet; I'm not really sure why that is though.

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Oww..just kidding. I see why things might be confusing, and the picture thing. We will work on making corrections. Thanks, love your board.

 

Ditto to Julie! Cropping the picture would help a bit. I am also not sure what you mean with mentioning your trips. Are you wanting to arrange vacationing with others, or are those experiences you want others to know about?

 

The other thing I noticed was your desired age range. This is completely my opinion- and it may not be shared by others- Do you really want to swing with those 18 years or so younger? I wouldn't want to. I would also be leery of someone who was interested in me if I were 18-28 years younger. I would wonder what we have in common, how is it possible to click, the differences in our lifestyles, etc.

 

I do like your picture- it just needs to be closer.

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We would love to hear comments and suggestions on our profile. Does anyone think our interests to be out of the mainstream of most swingers? Any thoughts will be appreciated. dodiddle swinglifestyle.com

 

I'm not as proficient at this as others but here are a few things I noticed...

 

A pic of any kind on an ad will get many more hits...even when faces are not shown.

 

A few typo's need to be looked at...Summer backyard night party at our place.

 

You state what you are looking for and what you would like to try very well.

 

Teresa

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I have to say that I am very impressed with the ads posted. I wish that more folks would take the time to put as much effort into their ads as it appears that you all do. I did not see anything on any of the ads that was not previously listed. And I do love the smiling face picture by smileytattoo!!

 

Here is ours if you want to take a look. Usually we are not taking a break, and do change our tag line from time to time. newbies123 on swinglifestyle.com

 

Another thing that I noticed, we lost some of our earlier certifications - not sure why. Anyone else had this problem?

 

PS - Our link most likely won't work because we do not have a public profile.

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A lot of your profiles are so good it makes me a little self conscious about ours, but I can always use any suggestions that might improve it.

 

So randp on swinglifestyle.com it is, let me know what you think.

 

As far as certification goes, we have a lot of the reservations that the Naughty's mentioned about them. And while we have met a fair number of people as a result of our sls ad, no one has ever offered to certify us yet; I'm not really sure why that is though.

You say that looks are not everything, but then you mention three times how attractive you guys are. I would be to self conscious to reply to your profile.

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Good timing!

 

We haven't been having much luck with ours, so we were going to redo it this weekend - maybe even (GASP) add a couple of pics... Big step for the monkeys...

 

Anyhoo - spoomonkey on SLS

 

Spoomonkey

 

PS - How do you get certified?

 

 

Nice profile spoo!! but pics would get you a lot more luck. We don't look at profiles without pics. You don't have to show your face ya know! lol....and someone has to cert you. There is a button on the bottom of your profile that says cert this person or look at this person's certs...but really they don't mean a whole lot! :)

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A lot of your profiles are so good it makes me a little self conscious about ours, but I can always use any suggestions that might improve it.

 

So randp on swinglifestyle.com it is, let me know what you think.

 

As far as certification goes, we have a lot of the reservations that the Naughty's mentioned about them. And while we have met a fair number of people as a result of our sls ad, no one has ever offered to certify us yet; I'm not really sure why that is though.

 

 

GT, I think your ad is pretty good! You give out a lot of information without being to wordy. You have clearly described what you are seeking, where your experience lies, and what your about.

 

The only thing I wished, was that there was a picture in default. It would be nice to see you without asking for one.

 

Have you asked a friend to certify you? Or have you certified a friend?

Maybe Just asking is a way to go....?

 

You sound like a great couple! Too Bad we live so far away :(

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