Singles Profile Reviews

[Yourlatincall]

Hello everyone, I just finished my SLS profile and would like constructive feedback. As I know most of you have an sls account, please search for my username (yourlatincall).

I'm a paid member although it may not be showing just yet (did it last night). Also I uploaded the public and private pictures this morning so, some may not be available either.

I think it's a bit too long, although I've heard over and over more is better when it comes to profiles. Your feedback about changes will be greatly appreciated.

Y.

[des1re06]

Here are my notes from reading your profile. It's very well written, but there are a few spelling/grammar errors.

Under Description,

Sorry, simply it isn't there. (reword to say, Sorry, it simply isn't there)

Under Our fantasies,

A MFM fantasy (the A should be capitalized).

We consider going to clubs (should be considered - past tense)

had long discussion about it (should be discussions (plural) or a long discussion (singular))

I swear! A try story. (should be A true story)

Under What else we'd like to say,

Take out the part that starts "In the same light:" Too much info.

Finally, I gave much thought before I open (should be opened - past tense)

(except fro an initial introduction) should be (except for)

and only we we all agree (2 many we's) I think you mean "and only when we all agree"

Good luck! You seem like a nice gentleman and should do well in your area. Do read the comments regarding single males in this forum, so you'll gain some insight into entering into this lifestyle.

Mrs. D

[Yourlatincall]

Thanks. It was a late night. I actually changed most of the typos this morning but I will double check to make sure I cought the ones you mentioned. Thanks again. Y.

Originally Posted by des1re06

Here are my notes from reading your profile. It's very well written, but there are a few spelling/grammar errors.

Under Description,

Sorry, simply it isn't there. (reword to say, Sorry, it simply isn't there)

Under Our fantasies,

A MFM fantasy (the A should be capitalized).

We consider going to clubs (should be considered - past tense)

had long discussion about it (should be discussions (plural) or a long discussion (singular))

I swear! A try story. (should be A true story)

Under What else we'd like to say,

Take out the part that starts "In the same light:" Too much info.

Finally, I gave much thought before I open (should be opened - past tense)

(except fro an initial introduction) should be (except for)

and only we we all agree (2 many we's) I think you mean "and only when we all agree"

Good luck! You seem like a nice gentleman and should do well in your area. Do read the comments regarding single males in this forum, so you'll gain some insight into entering into this lifestyle.

Mrs. D

[ncmd_couple]

Hmmm.... Well, honestly, if we were looking for a single male to play with and were in your area, we would consider you as a possibility. Good luck!

[Yourlatincall]

Thank you ncmd_couple. I have received some encouraging feedback from people in the area and I'm excited to get to know them. I know the swinging single is not an easy road, but I hope I get to meet some great people and have some fun on the way. Cheers! and Thanks!

[LikeMinds321]

I just read your profile and I am very impressed.

Although it's long, I glided right through it because it held my interest with every word.

I found it friendly, lively, humorous, clear, intelligent, specific, visual, honest and inviting. I thought, I sure would like to meet this guy, he sounds so interesting. You gave me the feeling that you could converse easily and could talk about many subjects and that's appealing to me.

Mrs. D earlier brought up some spelling and grammar errors, and you have made those changes. Because everything now looks so perfect, I have to mention that you've missed an apostrophe in your profile. I'm sure you'll spot it.

Good luck in meeting some great people on your new adventure!

LM

[Yourlatincall]

Yourlatincall <---- now in search of the missing apostrophe!

Thank you Likeminds! I know its a bit long, but hopefully people react like you did and continue reading the entire post. Thanks again!

[ukcheekyfella]

All constructive critisism very welcome

Daz xxx

[crazycatz]

I think it's a strong profile...the only thing is you don't separate the description of yourself from what you are looking for and the latter could be expanded on a little.

[Dynamar]

On a 1-10 scale of single male profiles I've seen, you scored a solid 9 in my book. Nice picture, good conversational tone, positive and upbeat. Good job!

Now... when are you coming to the Midwest U.S.?

[4321ready]

Hi everyone. Here is my SLS profile (4321ready) I hope will be reviewed:

Interest Levels
Tame 4 on a scale of 0-4 Couples 3 on a scale of 0-4
Moderate 4 on a scale of 0-4 Males
Wild 4 on a scale of 0-4 Females 3 on a scale of 0-4

Desired Age Range: 18 to 45
Other Info: Drinkers OK Smokers OK

We Are Looking For:
I would enjoy meeting people with maturity, intelligence, and a sense of humor. Physical attraction towards the woman is very important for me. However, in the past there have been a few women who attracted me because of their fantastic personalities, even though others did not believe they were attractive.

I am looking to experience this whole swinging lifestyle from the inside, to penetrate this subculture while slowly sliding into it. It may be a long, hard journey, but I'm sure I'll love it in the end.

I am aware that I am at the mercy of the court, so to speak. Couples and single women have the advantage over me in this lifestyle: what you say goes. This is fine.
Description:
I have a fair body, nice chest, and a bionic penis with kung-fu grip action. I am not pushy and I understand that people have boundaries, having strong self-control. Personality is very important to me and if I don't like someone then I simply cannot involve myself sexually with them.

By myself, do I live (that's my Yoda impression).

I enjoy snowboarding and the occasional lap swim, as well as reading, writing, and arithmetic. Well, not arithmetic, nor writing, but I do read. I just read Green Eggs and Ham cover-to-cover, and am currently reading Murder on the Orient Express, which is my first Agatha Christie. I am also into psychological, sociological, and various historical literature.

I eat relatively healthy, consuming mostly organic foods but still having a tough time with vegetables. I am in school right now majoring in social sciences, so if you like talking about social issues you know how talkative college students can be. Of course, there is a great deal I don't know, but pretending like I know is fun.

Our fantasies and/or real experiences:
My fantasies are to be able to always vote for the right president, and to end the war in Iraq.

What else we'd like to say, do, see, hear about and/or learn:
I am very polite, patient, and respectful. Unless you look at me funny, and then I will light myself on fire and run around naked screaming "aahhh I hate this place!".

[JustAskJulie]

Originally Posted by 4321ready

Hi everyone. Here is my SLS profile (4321ready) I hope will be reviewed:

I see that you have edited your actual SLS profile some since you copied and pasted to here, so my review is based on what you have on your actual SLS profile.....

You can link to your SLS profile from here (if you have external profile enabled on SLS) by clicking UserCP at the top of the page then "edit profile" and entering your SLS username where requested.

Review: I don't quite get your tagline, although I'm guessing it's a play on the fact that there's a million single guys out there (and you realize that). I'd probably just take off the 7A part. It's good that you are not taking yourself too seriously. Also, based on your picture you are rather cute (IMO).

Under "what we are looking for": it sounds like you really aren't interested in couples... and if you are, you aren't really considering the male half at all (as far as respecting him), or what you will/can be doing for them as a couple. You might want to rethink how that is written.

THe first paragraph there makes me really question that you even understand what you are saying in the second paragraph (about experiencing all that the swinging lifestyle has to offer).

In the above copy & paste that you posted, youhad a third paragraph which I think was a good one and one you should have left in your profile. I'm wondering why you removed it.

The rest of your profile was light-hearted and made me smile (which is all good). I would simply just work on that first part about what you are looking for - with the understanding that a couple looking for a single needs to feel that he understands where they are coming from as much as they need to understand where he is coming from.

[Mr.Essex]

If possible, I'd like it if someone reviewed my profile. I'm not actively looking for a couple at this time, but it would be nice to know if I'm even slightly fuckable.

[Taylor74]

I feel like such a dweeb asking for a review, but if someone wouldn't mind critiquing mine, I would appreciate it. Please be as honest as you can. Thanks in advance.

[aster]

Mr. Essex - I couldn't find your profile? What's your sls name?

Taylor74 - Very nice! It's written intelligently with a bit of humor. A tad long winded at times...but I'm terribly guilty of that myself.

Things i liked:
- The very first sentence is great!
- Good spelling and grammar
- Your overall approach to the lifestyle, and openness to diversity
- Your photo (nice!)
- Your humor
- Your tagline

Things for improvement:
- The paragraph begining "As a single male..." i'm not sure what you were meaning to say here?
- Fantasies and Experiences Section: Last sentence doesn't make sense...might be inadvertently insulting.
- Need more "physical" in the description section! I like your personality...now make me want your body!
- Need more in the fantasies...not just "who" but "what"...what is your idea of crazy fun?

Best of luck!