Trouble May be Brewing in Poly Triad

[YZF]

Originally Posted by WonderWhat

Native Spanish speaker here. Teacher of English as a second language, to boot.

YYZ, your Spanish sucks. You should have gotten a native Spanish-speaking accomplice into your game and at least tried to crank out something that is not as evidently the product of a native English speaker.

Your grammatical constructions shout "I'm a gringo!" Evident misuse of gender articles, misspellings with clear ties to English cognates, simple grammatical constructions used by a five-year olds, weird word ordering...

If I were to point out the logical contradictions within your story, I'd write about ten thousand more words. But since nobody will pay me for that, I think I'll stop for now. I've got better things to do.


YYZ, you're full of it.

Julie, I think it would be a good idea to boot this impostor.

YZF here. I have no idea where you would be native to that your Spanish would any different. Quita's entry is conversational in tone and she did not include the formal "vos" and "vuestro" and other similar stuff in her post.

I have spoken Spanish my whole life and I can tell you there is nothing wrong with what Quita regarding structure or anything else. But I do wonder why you are pushing yourself off as a wunderkind as far as Spanish. I did not interpret her message because I did not want to spin anything she had to say in it.

If I was to say in Spanish anything similar to what Quita wrote, I doubt that it would sound any different.

[VegasLee]

YZF or who ever you are.

You have more then shown this is all about you, not the women that you state are in your life.

All of that "don't go there" when it comes to the rules of life with this wife you talk of.

Swinging or relationships is not just about any one person.

Why you wasting all this time trying to explain anything to any of us anyway. We are nothing more then pixels on the Internet and mean nothing to you.

After reading more of your postings I tend to think this is just your way of spending time anyway so why not get back to work at what ever it is you do.

You have made yourself like like a real ass in the way you treat women and relationships so I am hoping this is fiction. Someone like that in real life has no business in a relationship.

[JustAskJulie]

Originally Posted by VegasLee

Why you wasting all this time trying to explain anything to any of us anyway. We are nothing more then pixels on the Internet and mean nothing to you.

He evidently needs the practice in character building and story flow.

[Chicup]

Originally Posted by JustAskJulie

He evidently needs the practice in character building and story flow.

This is really an excellent idea. I've been putzing around with fiction writing and what an excellent medium.

[WildMiCouple]

Originally Posted by YZF

YZF here. Let me address a few things. I was in prison and released in 2001. It was supposed to have been life with out parole....blah blah blah

All I had to my name were a couple of horrid polo style shirts...blah blah blah

During my time in prison several things happened....blah blah blah

I got a job in a gas station.......blah blah blah

A couple of months later a guy leased the restaurant from me. blah blah blah

I went into the deal with him..... blah blah blah

I had started seeing Jack in 2001.....blah blah blah

In 2006 we decided to move in together......blah blah blah

I had also patched things up with my dad..... blah, blah blah

Jack offering up booty to another member here is just playful banter with someone she will likely never meet. At least that is how I take it.

This reads like you just made it up. How anyone can remember detail by detail things that happened up to 10 yrs ago is ridiculous As the others have said, it's pretty obvious your practicing your fiction skills.

Originally Posted by Chicup

This is really an excellent idea. I've been putzing around with fiction writing and what an excellent medium.

I'm really starting to think this is Chicup

Brett

[xxxboxy]

I remember stuff in detail like that, but my story isn't nearly as exciting

[Chicup]

I'm still surprised how my life all turned out, it really looked like a disaster after my 'accident' in 95, and I thought I'd be pumping gas the rest of my life. Instead I'm... well lets save that for later.

You can call me Ishmael, no its no my real name, but I have a thing for whales. Anyways, I was involved in what you could say was an altercation back in 95, he had it coming but that doesn't work well as a defense if you are a male. So I get 6 years for manslaughter, and end up in one of the biggest shitholes in the country, Statesville prison, Joliet. Yes the same one from the blues brothers, only not nearly as funny and with a lot more stabbings. I joined an Aryan gang just to stay alive, and when I came out five years later I would have been ready to try out for the lead of American history X. Muscled, bedazzled with the cheap black tattoos of prison, and hungry for anything.

Anything turned out to be a job at a gas station, but after 6 years hell, it was a little piece of hydrocarbonated heaven.

Anything also turned out to be a great little Hispanic number named Chiquita. No thats not her real name either, but I like bananas. She was a regular customer at the station, and spent more and more time talking to me as she bought her Virgina Slims and lotto tickets. Well it turns out Chiquita had a taste for the badboys, and fresh out of prison, the only thing I looked was bad. It also happened that her husband had been pushing for a threesome for a long time, and she picked me to be the lucky man. Being I was just out of prison, and the closest thing I'd seen to boobs were the flesh gobules that hung on 'Fat Ass Jim' in the prison shower, I never even said yes, I just asked when.

It started as a threesome, but quickly her husband, 'el ratón pequeño' as Chiquita called him, went to bed. We had sex for hours on end, every ten minutes I was like old faithful, with six years of pent up sexual frustration gushing through me onto, into, and generally around her person. My prison stamina carried me though the entire night until dawn when the mouse awoke. He joined us once and we went our separate ways. He tried a threesome once again, but he was 'one and done' and I continued all night, better than most mortal men, oddly she was never sore, perhaps she was in prison as well.

Well to make this long missive shorter, he gave up joining us and let us have our fun without him, last I heard they were divorced, I don't think she could look him in the eye as a real man anymore.

I was still an ex-con working at a gas station with prison tattoos, but little did I know that my life would change radically from here....

[YZF]

Originally Posted by WildMiCouple

This reads like you just made it up. How anyone can remember detail by detail things that happened up to 10 yrs ago is ridiculous As the others have said, it's pretty obvious your practicing your fiction skills.


I'm really starting to think this is Chicup

Brett

5 years ago when I first started posting here I said I had been in prison. I can remember stuff from when I was 5 dude. And I can recall them in detail. I remember what they gave me to wear the day I got out of prison because it was a great day. I was an inmate in the morning and a free man that afternoon how would anyone forget that? What I would find surprising was if you could not remember big events from 10 years ago. That you could not remember what you wore the night you met your wife or what she wore.

I was stationed in Korea in 1989 and I was with a lot of women there. Some I could not remember if you tortured me, but others I can remember them as clear as if it was yesterday. What they looked like, how their hair felt, how their tongue felt when it wrestled with mine. Their perfume.

You really expect me not to remember who I went into business with? Have you never been in a car wreck? Have you not ever had an event worth remembering? I do not remember every play of my high school football career but I remember the ones where I took a big hit on special teams or when I ran back an interception for a touchdown or got a sack. You really don't remember stuff like this?

[WonderWhat]

Originally Posted by YZF

[...] I do wonder why you are pushing yourself off as a wunderkind as far as Spanish.

No, no wunderkind, just someone with university level education in Mexico and in the US, with formal training in teaching both languages.

Originally Posted by YZF

I have spoken Spanish my whole life and I can tell you there is nothing wrong with what Quita regarding structure or anything else.
[...]
If I was to say in Spanish anything similar to what Quita wrote, I doubt that it would sound any different.

That's just the point. You have spoken broken Spanish your whole life. You see no problem with what you wrote. Show that to anybody with a high school level education in Spanish --formal and literate Spanish education-- and he'll ask if whomever wrote that made it through secondary school.

Just for kicks, because I've got nothing to do while I drink a glass of wine (and because I just can't resist the temptation to bring out the elephant gun to swat a fly while shutting up a loudmouth, if you pardon my mixed metaphors), I'm going to do a really quick copyedit what you wrote, for spelling and grammar. Not for style.



OK, let's be charitable and ignore accents and eñes:



A rich Ecuadorean family would surely afford to send their daughter to a school that can at least teach how to spell Ecuador correctly, the difference between "buena fortuna" and "considerable fortuna," hand out bad grades on badly used reflexive verbs, and teach the correct use of the gendered articles and pronouns ("el", "la", "un(os)", "una(s)", "lo(s)", "la(s)", etc. ) and suffices ("-o(s)", "-a(s)", etc.).

Oh, sorry. You don't even need to be literate to use gendered articles, pronouns and suffices correctly in Spanish. Illiterate five-year olds know how to use them. English speakers who did not grow up using gendered articles misuse them consistently.

That's the clincher, you see. All the rest was just me showing off.

[WonderWhat]

Originally Posted by Chicup

This is really an excellent idea. I've been putzing around with fiction writing and what an excellent medium.

Originally Posted by Chicup

I'm still surprised how my life all turned out, [...]

You can call me Ishmael, no its no my real name, but I have a thing for whales. [...]
Anything also turned out to be a great little Hispanic number named Chiquita. No thats not her real name either, but I like bananas. [...]

Chicup, you simultaneously crack me up and impress me. That reads pretty much like a good hardboiled detective novel.

I bet you can write YZF's book with more panache, style and consistency. Go for it.

[ANGEDKY(mr)]

Shit, I wanna know what factors in your crime could even possibly cause a Judge to think about imposing sentencing enhancments increasing a max incarceration from 5yrs to LIFE W/O??? and disregard the jury aspect altogether............


That, afterall is the basic idea behind Apprendi v. NJ


Not to mention your extra 14 months extra incarceration........

[YZF]

Originally Posted by ANGEDKY(mr)

Shit, I wanna know what factors in your crime could even possibly cause a Judge to think about imposing sentencing enhancments increasing a max incarceration from 5yrs to LIFE W/O??? and disregard the jury aspect altogether............


That, afterall is the basic idea behind Apprendi v. NJ


Not to mention your extra 14 months extra incarceration........

It was drugs. I was busted with 379 pounds of weed. Some others that they tried to link as co-conspirators were busted with weed and coke. I was tried for the amount I had on me. At sentencing they used the weed and coke the others were busted with as guidelines. Under the guidelines, it amounted to life without parole. When I was resentenced the judge gave me the mandatory minimum of 60 months. I had already done 14 months more than the minimum mandatory. It was pretty much common practice to sentence in this manner in federal courts before Apprendi.

There were several informants in my case and because of this my first four years were spent in prisons outside of Texas. FCI Sheridan, Oregon first then FCI Safford, Arizona.

[ALilOEverything]

I believe most of your story YZF, I noted where you posted on other types of forums (under a different name that was easy to figure out) over the past many years that dealt with your army time, prison time, passion for motorcylces. That would be a long lie over the past years, but who knows. Because of that I'm going to address the main issue. You're wife isn't feeling like your #1 anymore and that's a serious problem. You won't move forward until she does. It's time to refocus, the longer you resist the worse it will make it. If you're third really doesn't mind being #2 I'm sure she won't mind taking a step back.

[prometheius]

ALilOEverything, thanks for getting this thread back to the point! What the YZF's & Quita have said may be true, maybe not, how would we ever know? The point is, many of us come to this forum to learn about what we don't know. Whether or not this saga is fictitious, I hope to learn what I can about polyamorism, and swinging in general that I could apply to any situation that may arise in my/our lifestyle endeavors. There are some very intelligent people who post on this forum. As always, I hope they will see beyond what might be and comment on their take of the given situation.
I hope the YZF triad can get ample information they can use to work this all out favorably. If not, I don't have healthcare coverage and would love to have a medical person around the house.

[xxxboxy]

Originally Posted by ALilOEverything

I believe most of your story YZF, I noted where you posted on other types of forums (under a different name that was easy to figure out) over the past many years that dealt with your army time, prison time, passion for motorcylces. That would be a long lie over the past years, but who knows. Because of that I'm going to address the main issue. You're wife isn't feeling like your #1 anymore and that's a serious problem. You won't move forward until she does. It's time to refocus, the longer you resist the worse it will make it. If you're third really doesn't mind being #2 I'm sure she won't mind taking a step back.

I'm pretty sure that I've even seen him post on other forums as well. Not too many Apprendi vs NJ cases involving weed etc. get thrown around on the web.