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Vespertine · 02-17-2005, 04:54 PM

snowman...

I agree with everything Julie pointed out. One thing that I think you might want to scratch off your add is this:

"...and don't like getting involved with endless emails."

A lot of couples will want to get to know you a little prior to meeting you. Some readers might make the assumption that you're not into taking some online time to get a feel for one another. Just my opinion.

I also think you need to come up with a better tag line then this.

"another single male but give me a chance"

Your tag line needs to POP since you're a single man. This tag line almost admits defeat before the reader even views your profile. Make it stand out, make it comfortable, make it memorable.... make couples want to check it out.

02-17-2005, 04:54 PM	#14 (permalink)
Vespertine Swingers Board Addict Join Date: Jun 2004 Posts: 3,688 Location: Shangri La Status: Happily Married	Re: Singles Profile Reviews snowman... I agree with everything Julie pointed out. One thing that I think you might want to scratch off your add is this: "...and don't like getting involved with endless emails." A lot of couples will want to get to know you a little prior to meeting you. Some readers might make the assumption that you're not into taking some online time to get a feel for one another. Just my opinion. I also think you need to come up with a better tag line then this. "another single male but give me a chance" Your tag line needs to POP since you're a single man. This tag line almost admits defeat before the reader even views your profile. Make it stand out, make it comfortable, make it memorable.... make couples want to check it out. __________________ Ves The art of life lies in taking pleasures as they pass, and the keenest pleasures are not intellectual, nor are they always moral.